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Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 29 Oct 2014, 13:10
by ADFX-01-Morgan
Dragonrider Testimonies
Summary
Prologue: This is Berk
Prologue
Gobber’s Testimony: The Iron Maiden
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---BONUS: Steel Butterfly Class Aerial Battleship Iron Maiden---
Iron Maiden
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Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachhead (Click Me)

Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 29 Oct 2014, 13:33
by Pikey
Love it. Loved every last bit of it. Especially that one bit where the guy comes in with the rockets... oh my lordy how you managed to pull that off with such magnificent writing! The explosions... the chaos! Yet it all kept itself under control, superb.

10/10 - ign. 8)

Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 29 Oct 2014, 13:35
by ADFX-01-Morgan
But there have yet to be any explosions. Or rockets.

=S

Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 29 Oct 2014, 13:49
by Pikey
I read in between the lines. I'm more than your average reader.

Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 29 Oct 2014, 14:30
by ADFX-01-Morgan
I look forward to future critiques in that case =D.

Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 03 Nov 2014, 12:58
by ADFX-01-Morgan
Double post, but Gobber's Testimony is up. Check the first post.

Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 03 Nov 2014, 18:53
by draconicwyvern
A tremendously detailed story. I wish I had the ability to do that :)

Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 03 Nov 2014, 20:28
by ADFX-01-Morgan
I find that detail for detail's sake doesn't work. Reflecting on the latest chapter, the least satisfying part of it was writing about what the Iron Maiden looks like, because it's description for the sake of description, and just drags. Kinda like one of Ebony Dark'ness Raven Dementia Way's dresses. I personally find that its easier to throw in important details by imagining you're filming the scene, and you've got to focus on certain things with the camera to get the shot to work. Once you figure out what's important to your scene, you can weight the description towards those areas or points of interest.

You can do man, especially if you want to do NaNoWriMo. Good luck. ;)

Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 03 Nov 2014, 22:59
by draconicwyvern
ADFX-01-Morgan
04 Nov 2014, 00:28
I find that detail for detail's sake doesn't work. Reflecting on the latest chapter, the least satisfying part of it was writing about what the Iron Maiden looks like, because it's description for the sake of description, and just drags. Kinda like one of Ebony Dark'ness Raven Dementia Way's dresses. I personally find that its easier to throw in important details by imagining you're filming the scene, and you've got to focus on certain things with the camera to get the shot to work. Once you figure out what's important to your scene, you can weight the description towards those areas or points of interest.

You can do man, especially if you want to do NaNoWriMo. Good luck. ;)
Thanks. Details are tricky sometimes, in a few instances you don't need them or else it wouldn't be a nice flowing sentence. And yet, if details are scarce, the writing zips by way too quickly.

I've attempted NNWM last year, and failed miserably with 3000 words. Hopefully I'll get past that, at least.

And a good luck to you for finishing this story. Sometimes tying loose ends is one of the trickiest things to a plot :)

Dragonrider Testimonies - Updated 22nd Dec: Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachead

Posted: 22 Dec 2014, 08:45
by ADFX-01-Morgan
Fishlegs’ Testimony: Beachhead
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