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ADFX-01-Morgan
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Dragonrider Testimonies
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Prologue: This is Berk
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Gobber’s Testimony: The Iron Maiden
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---BONUS: Steel Butterfly Class Aerial Battleship Iron Maiden---
Iron Maiden
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Fishlegs' Testimony - Beachhead (Click Me)

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Wow!

Love it. Loved every last bit of it. Especially that one bit where the guy comes in with the rockets... oh my lordy how you managed to pull that off with such magnificent writing! The explosions... the chaos! Yet it all kept itself under control, superb.

10/10 - ign. 8)
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But there have yet to be any explosions. Or rockets.

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Wow!

I read in between the lines. I'm more than your average reader.
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I look forward to future critiques in that case =D.

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Double post, but Gobber's Testimony is up. Check the first post.

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A tremendously detailed story. I wish I had the ability to do that :)
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I find that detail for detail's sake doesn't work. Reflecting on the latest chapter, the least satisfying part of it was writing about what the Iron Maiden looks like, because it's description for the sake of description, and just drags. Kinda like one of Ebony Dark'ness Raven Dementia Way's dresses. I personally find that its easier to throw in important details by imagining you're filming the scene, and you've got to focus on certain things with the camera to get the shot to work. Once you figure out what's important to your scene, you can weight the description towards those areas or points of interest.

You can do man, especially if you want to do NaNoWriMo. Good luck. ;)

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04 Nov 2014, 00:28
I find that detail for detail's sake doesn't work. Reflecting on the latest chapter, the least satisfying part of it was writing about what the Iron Maiden looks like, because it's description for the sake of description, and just drags. Kinda like one of Ebony Dark'ness Raven Dementia Way's dresses. I personally find that its easier to throw in important details by imagining you're filming the scene, and you've got to focus on certain things with the camera to get the shot to work. Once you figure out what's important to your scene, you can weight the description towards those areas or points of interest.

You can do man, especially if you want to do NaNoWriMo. Good luck. ;)
Thanks. Details are tricky sometimes, in a few instances you don't need them or else it wouldn't be a nice flowing sentence. And yet, if details are scarce, the writing zips by way too quickly.

I've attempted NNWM last year, and failed miserably with 3000 words. Hopefully I'll get past that, at least.

And a good luck to you for finishing this story. Sometimes tying loose ends is one of the trickiest things to a plot :)
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Fishlegs’ Testimony: Beachhead
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