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| Topic Started: 08 Sep 2014, 15:24 (2612 Views) | |
| HTTYD PT | 08 Sep 2014, 15:24 Post #1 |
Gronckle
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Chapter 1 Hello guys my name is chris. I Live in one of the island that belongs to the archipelago of berk but my people said that black things flying over our island in some times put the cause and terror in our population. Was in the woods looking for clues. Had found one type scale or skin black. I can not tell if it was from a dragon i didin´t know. I walked a bit more but this falls into a trunk but that trunk saved my life because he had walk 1 more centímetro i was fallen into a big hole. End of Chapter 1 |
| draconicwyvern | 08 Sep 2014, 22:10 Post #2 |
kyt, 18, she/her.
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Interesting start. A little confused by the title though… |
     
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| mr.k.c.w. | 08 Sep 2014, 23:10 Post #3 |
Dragon fan in Hong Kong
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It is a start, but I think you should always check for grammatical and spelling problems before you post this. Use Word or any kind of word-processing software that supports spell-checkers and grammar checkers that are out there to write your story. Only then, you can copy and paste it here.(Or you can just trust your instincts and try to type a story right here...though I won't do that if I were you...) Also, just saying, if you're going to write a story or whatever, you don't need to cut off shortly to finish a chapter. Personally, I enjoy longer chapters, and I'm sure many others out there also do, and for me, 100 words per chapter is not going to be enough(it's not even close to what I would call a chapter...). So, what I recommend is that you use line breakers, or any kind of indications that represents a different narrative part. That way, you can make the chapter longer, without sacrificing the need to write more in that part of the story. ...Which brings me to my next point. Write with more detail. Don't be afraid to not do that. Write a little more background information. Be more clear of what you are writing. Think before you write anything, so that readers won't be confused as to what is happening. Maybe I'm being nitpicky(and a hypocrite, because even I can't follow those guidelines precisely...), but I'm sure that if you do, the readers can enjoy your stories much more. |
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| HTTYD PT | 09 Sep 2014, 17:22 Post #4 |
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Gronckle
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ok thanks for the info but I will continue the story ok? |
| HTTYD PT | 09 Sep 2014, 17:28 Post #5 |
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Gronckle
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After seeing that hole thought: -could Be where the black shadows to come out by the terror in our village. I have to investigate this case was the best by a rope to descend the hole. When I came down to this hole, I was amazed at what I saw. It was a cave but with several holes in it. Haaaaa !!!!! This should be here that swadows have their nests at least we already know that can fly. So could be dragons or large birds. I went to one of the holes where the shadows were for tomorrow. -Wait But there was morning and saw nothing that had happened here!!! I realized at last week we had i fire an the swadows left this but today they will return belive me. But I went to one of the holes and saw an egg. -One EGG!!! I do not understand this. But already know that can help me this. And out of this cave and went right to my village. There was one person who came to see was how the islands ha around berk was ERET. Yes he was the all island verify if everything was at peace. When he came to my island I went to him and dissie: -Son Eret can make a question? He replied: of course -Eret Can see what this black skin? Hmmm ... this seems family but i think is a skin of a night fury -OF A NIGHT FURY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -I´m not Sure but it seems And this egg ?? ERET He was amazed and said: I'll take this to my specialist dragons the hiccup. -ok ok ... Know is that I was the only Viking who never go to berk yes it's sad. |
| mr.k.c.w. | 09 Sep 2014, 18:56 Post #6 |
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Dragon fan in Hong Kong
[b](Above this title is a very dorky Hiccup.) [/b]
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Well, you are getting there in terms of content(Even though I still thinks it's a bit short...). But I think you probably should really work on your grammar. Maybe I sound like a Grammar Nazi now, but making your story as grammatically correct as possible, in my opinion, can make the readers enjoy your stories even more. Of course, you don't need to strictly follow my advice, it's an advice. You can do as much as you want. But if you really wanted readers to enjoy your stories, it is best to fix up your grammar. |
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| draco | 12 Sep 2014, 04:37 Post #7 |
mystery dragon, pic drawn by night fury fire. Thank you :)
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It's a great start. But it's a little confusing. |
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Dragons, need I say more. Hiccup, chief of berc, dragon master. Toothless, alpha dragon. You and me bud we can do this, as one. It's just a zipple misunderstanding I like a pit, but I love a boar pit. i am hurt,I am very much hurt. | |
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