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| Topic Started: 25 Apr 2014, 14:07 (12413 Views) | |
| SplashTheScauldron | 25 Apr 2014, 14:07 Post #1 |
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Well... I want to share my first fanficion with all of your guys  First a really huge enormous thanks to Snuckles, who helps me after every chapter to ge my spelling a bit less worse  Second thing: Please don't publish the story without my agreeing or something like this... Third thing: This is my first fanficion, so I'm still learning ^^. The chapters are a bit short and I'm not good in making dialouges but feel free to give me some tips for the fellow chapters! Okay... here we go, enyoy! Prologue The two dragons stand on a cliff and look out over the sea. Thunder roars in the clouds and random streaks of lightning light up the sky. Waves smack against the big rocks in the water. “She's late again...,” says the male dragon. “What should we do if she won't come back?” “Don't worry,” the other dragon says. “Spark, she will be back soon.” She raises her graceful head and looks to the clouds. “Your sister is strong, she will make it. Just look at the lightning, that's a good sign! She is a Skrill, remember?” She looks at him. “It was her own decision, she knows what she's doing.” Spark looked worriedly at his claws. His sister wants to find Nightfurys', because the dragons on the Skrill island are in danger. Nightfurys' are the only dragons that are as strong as Skrills, and the dragons here need as much help as they can get. The humans on the islands around Skrill island come often to the island and hunt the poor reptiles. Their weapons are so strong that most dragons are not able to escape. His sister thinks there only hope is to find the Nightfurys and attack with against the humans. But, it's a long and dangerous way to the Nightfury island. “Spark?” Thunderclaw asks. “It's getting late, we should go sleep now.” “I'll come later” Spark says. Thunderclaw flies away, leaving him back on the cliff. “Please come back, please don't leave me,” whispers Spark. The only answer he gets is the angry roar of the thunder. And yeah... another thing, I will try to upload every second day, and can you suggest me after a few chapters a title for the story? Splash |
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Yes, I ship Dagur and Hiccup. I apologize for cringy posts I made some years ago | |
| Lageos | 25 Apr 2014, 14:34 Post #2 |
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It sounds great so far, I look forward to reading more of it!, if I have any advice to give you I would say to switch the perspective as well as the tense I did it that way as well but 20k words into my story I decided to switch it, well it is at least my preference so instead of this: “Spark?” Thunderclaw asks. “It's getting late, we should go sleep now.” It could be this: “Spark?” Thunderclaw asked aloud as she looked at the the other Skrill, she let out an sighing before she continued “It's getting late, we should go sleep now.” that is my two cents at least, anyways, it is sounding good so far. |
| Night fury fire | 25 Apr 2014, 15:47 Post #3 |
[b] [color=blue]We're fangirls! It's an occupational hazard... [/color] [/b] 
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Well done I will keep reading 
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| AuroraBorealis | 25 Apr 2014, 21:27 Post #4 |
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Love it! I will keep reading!
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What should I write on my signature? Hmm... I am a Httyd, Gravity Falls and Portal (One and two) fan. I'm also a bookworm and an introvert. That was pretty random, but that's me summed up in two sentences. | |
| SplashTheScauldron | 26 Apr 2014, 12:51 Post #5 |
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Thank you guys! I'll try Baricuda ^^ |
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Yes, I ship Dagur and Hiccup. I apologize for cringy posts I made some years ago | |
| Lageos | 26 Apr 2014, 13:17 Post #6 |
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 I just noticed that I made mistake, what I was suggesting was "Keep the story in third person, but change the tense into past tense" Because I am that dumb, I messed that up XD and again it is only a suggestion, so whatever you feel like doing, you should do.
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| SplashTheScauldron | 27 Apr 2014, 03:18 Post #7 |
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Time to update my story! Place and persons have changed, but the skrills from the proulouge will get important later ^^. So here we go.... Chapter 1 There is one thing that I hate about rowing: If you are sitting in a viking boat, you can't do it alone. “Go on! Faster!,“ Our teacher shouts. “Even a one legged yak would get us!“ “Those don't exist...,“ someone behind me whispers. My name is Hiccup the IV. There is nothing interesting about me, that I could tell you... I live on the island, Berk. In the old stories, Berk was a dragon island 200 years ago. Vikings which ride on dragons and defended Berk with them. But those are legends. Nobody really believes them. In the middle of berk are 6 statues of the “Dragon Riders“ and their dragons. Nobody removes them cause everyone is worried that Thor would be angry about it (that's kinda ironic, I know). “What are you doing, Hiccup? Don't be so slow!“ Shouts our teacher and punches my shoulder. Someone laughs. I clench my teeth and try to row faster, but I don't have the strength for more. A weak viking often gets the name Hiccup. I hate that feeling, even if you do your best and it's still not enough. It's afternoon. Which means the rowing-and-other-stuff lessons are out. The forest is always a place where I can be alone and forget the world around me. I look around. It's spring. The whole island is green with birds singing in the trees. Berk is really one of the best islands in the north. That's a problem too. There are many viking clans out there which want to live on Berk. My viking clan always has to defend this island. I look up to the sky. It will rain soon. I groan. Suddenly, the ground under me disappears. A bit short but I hope you like it
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Yes, I ship Dagur and Hiccup. I apologize for cringy posts I made some years ago | |
| AuroraBorealis | 28 Apr 2014, 01:38 Post #8 |
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Ooh, I love where this is going!
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What should I write on my signature? Hmm... I am a Httyd, Gravity Falls and Portal (One and two) fan. I'm also a bookworm and an introvert. That was pretty random, but that's me summed up in two sentences. | |
| SplashTheScauldron | 28 Apr 2014, 09:49 Post #9 |
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Thank you! ^^ |
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Yes, I ship Dagur and Hiccup. I apologize for cringy posts I made some years ago | |
| SplashTheScauldron | 28 Apr 2014, 09:51 Post #10 |
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Chapter 2! It gets exiting... Chapter 2 I wake up. The first thing I recognized: It's cold. The second thing I recognized: Its never cold in my room. The third thing I recognized: I'm not in my room. I open my eyes. Wait, why am I lying in a cove? Then I remember. I stand up and look around. The walls of the cove are in a light gray, partially covered with vines of ivy. In the middle is a small pond with fishes. Suddenly it starts to rain. Luckily I spy a little cave on the side of the cove, which I could use to stay dry. But it is still cold, so I decide to make a fire. When I search a few pieces of dry wood, I notice a drawing on a wall of the cave. My eyes wide. It was a sketch of a dragon and a human. I step closer to it. “I know you guys...” I whisper. I'm sure, it's a sketch of Hiccup the III and his dragon Toothless. I know them from the statues in the middle of Berk. But something has been wrote under the sketch. “Do you believe?” Suddenly I feel like someone watches me. I look closely to Toothless' eyes. They are looking behind me! I turn around slowly. On a stone next to the wall is a book. I took a deep breath. “You got to be kidding me...” I muttered. “Something goes wrong here, a book can't just appear!” But I never found out how it got there. I move slowly to the book. The golden letters on it read “The Book Of Dragons” “Yes... I believe,” I answer to the drawing. But the drawing remained silent. The rest of the day I spend in the cove, reading the book. It was like a lexicon about dragons. About water dragons, two headed dragons, small dragons, big dragons, dragons which can change their colors... It was amazing. But it turned dark outside, so I had to leave the cove. I hide the book under my vest and start climbing out of the cove, only watched by the rising moon. |
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