cometotheberkside

27 Jun 2014, 17:22

Awesome! I hope you get past your writer's block soon! (I'm experiencing it now... )

I've finally got out of my writers' block! I've had some new ideas, and I will use them in the following chapter!

Chapter 21

 

"W-what is that?!' I gasped.
"Your new king.' the human replied, with a nasty smile.
'You do not know how lucky you are, Night Fury...To be the first dragon under the power and control of my Bewilderbeast!'
'I will never, ever bow down to him, or you.'
The human laughed; it was not a nice one.
'We'll see about that... Do you think you can resist him?! Not even a mighty Night Fury like you can resist the Alpha. How does that feel? A Night Fury, forced to bow down to a mere Bewilderbeast, and a human?'
He's trying to break me, I thought. And it's working...
The human nodded in satisfaction when I went into the submissive position: lying down, head on paws, ears back.
'That wasn't so bad, was it?' he sneered.
I didn't reply.
He raised his stick, and pointed it at his Bewilderbeast, and then at me.
The last thing I remember him saying, in an echoey voice, was:
'This will hurt you a lot more than it hurts me.'
Then, pain. Unimaginable pain. Excruciating pain. I longed to block out his song! My head was bursting, until I thought I could take no more, and then...darkness. Merciful, painless, darkness.

Chapter 22

 

"Go and check on the dragons, boy.' Drago told me.
I nodded.
I watched the Bewilderbeast and the Night Fury, sleeping. The Night Fury had passed out when the change had been completed, so he was moved to the Bewilderbeast's cage.
They looked so miserable, even in sleep. I wondered if they were having nightmares. I stayed there for a few more minutes, until I heard a small growl from the Night Fury, although it's eyes were closed. It must have smelled me. I decided to leave, before it woke up.
Yolmah's POV
"What...happened...' I said aloud, to nobody in particular.
The Bewilderbeast laughed.
"What happened? You just became like me, little dragon. That is what happened. Prepare for a life of pain and suffering, from my master.'
At that moment, our master came in. I closed my eyes, and pretended to be asleep. As he walked by, he kicked the Bewilderbeast. My Alpha roared in pain. Our master appeared to find this amusing.
He walked over to me, and as he did so, I couldn't suppress a whimper.
Then, apparently satisfied that I was fearing him, he left, but not before turning around, and leering at me in triumph.

cometotheberkside

05 Jul 2014, 18:58

Great work! I think that adding the [name]'s POV makes reading it easier, so it's good that you implemented that

Chapter 23

 

Valka's POV
Cloudjumper nuzzled my face, and purred. I did the same to him.
I love you.
This was our ritual before we went out for a night flight.
I climbed onto the Stormcutter's back, and we flew out of the Sanctuary.
Eret's POV
I pulled out my spyglass, and looked to the sky. I could just see a dragon with it's wings shaped like an X. There was a human seated on it's back.
"Drago! I've found the dragon rider!'
He turned to his Bewilderbeast.
"Call the tracker Changewings, and the Night Fury.'
The gigantic dragon roared into the night sky.
Valka's POV
What was that?
That was a Bewilderbeast call. It's summoning some Changewings and a Night Fury.
There's another Bewilderbeast?
Yes. To us dragons in the Sanctuary, he is known as the Dark One.
Suddenly, we felt a change in the winds as two shapes flew past us.
Cloudjumper sniffed the cold night air, and growled.
Those Changewings... They don't smell normal.
What do they smell of?
Evil.
Eret's POV
Two Changewings suddenly came out of the sky, and landed next to the Night Fury.
"What do you need us for, Master?'
"Here's the plan.' Drago said.
'The Night Fury will divebomb the Stormcutter, so it is stunned. Then, my Bewilderbeast will mind control the Stormcutter, so that it pushes it's rider from it's back. You will carry off the rider, as they are falling.'
'Brilliant plan, Master.'
'I know. That's why I make the plans, not you. Now GO!"
Yolmah's POV
At my master's command, I flew up into the night sky. I had grown a lot since my capture, and I could fly better too. I hid in the darkness, waiting until I could hear the Stormcutter's wing-beats. Then I struck.
Valka's POV
OW! What happened?!
I was just flying along, and then a dragon- a Night Fury- divebombed me!
Then, suddenly, Cloudjumper growled at me.
Cloudjumper-
Cloudjumper's POV
The voice of the Dark One filled my head.
YOU CANNOT RESIST ME.
I heard my mistress's voice.
Fight back, Cloudjumper! Fight it!
But I could not.
The Dark One laughed.
YOU BELONG TO MY MASTER NOW.

cometotheberkside

06 Jul 2014, 12:53

The story sounds awesome!